One peer mentioned we need a source for the horror story from Philadelphia which we will put in for the final draft. The same peer suggested that it was difficult to tell which stories were true and which were fiction. The person from the writing center and most of the members of our team agree that it's not necessary and therefore we have decided to leave those sections as is.
Sources will be added to information in the paper for our readers to be able to better follow and understand our logic. These sources will also help others to distinguish fact from fiction.
From the writing center, we received advice on making shorter paragraphs, which we have done, and the editor suggested we choose a word other than, "litigiousness," which we have not yet decided whether we will substitute with a different word. Since there were two sections that were co-written by two people, it was suggested that to check for repetitiveness to make sure the two writers did not repeat information, which we will do. In one section where we wrote about advice that was given to online daters, the editor suggested we put a name to the advisor in order to give him/her credibility. We will attempt to do so, or at the very least put in a citation for that section. Finally, advice was offered on particular sentences here and there to remove and wording that should be changed and that advice we also have decided to take.
Team 4 Handbook Ex.
One peer mentioned we need a source for the horror story from Philadelphia which we will put in for the final draft. The same peer suggested that it was difficult to tell which stories were true and which were fiction. The person from the writing center and most of the members of our team agree that it's not necessary and therefore we have decided to leave those sections as is.
Sources will be added to information in the paper for our readers to be able to better follow and understand our logic. These sources will also help others to distinguish fact from fiction.
From the writing center, we received advice on making shorter paragraphs, which we have done, and the editor suggested we choose a word other than, "litigiousness," which we have not yet decided whether we will substitute with a different word. Since there were two sections that were co-written by two people, it was suggested that to check for repetitiveness to make sure the two writers did not repeat information, which we will do. In one section where we wrote about advice that was given to online daters, the editor suggested we put a name to the advisor in order to give him/her credibility. We will attempt to do so, or at the very least put in a citation for that section. Finally, advice was offered on particular sentences here and there to remove and wording that should be changed and that advice we also have decided to take.